It’s Open Link night at Dverse Poets and a chance to share some of our own poetry. I have been trying to develop my skills at sonnets and odes ever since attending a poetry workshop run by the poet Daljit Nagra at Keat’s House, London.
On our way back from our adventures in the Azores I thought I should write my own sonnet sequence to a country I love. Portugal! I have three under way but the sonnet form does require steady concentration and still needs to capture my true intentions. We watched some children playing with a dog when they should be at school and saw another side to an island paradise of poverty in a fishing town. We also discovered how much of the original forest has been lost and the threats to nature there. San/ Sao Miguel in the Azores is a microcosm reflecting our macrocosm of Planet Earth. Inside the core is violent heat ready to burst out through volcanic eruptions.
Islands like San/Sao Miguel have been formed by volcanoes and over millennia slowly bloomed into vibrant life.
Sonnet 1
To Sao Miguel
O mild isle wherein hides hidden heat
From deep within your cratered core
Volcanic lava could spit more
But Furness folk stew pots for us to eat
For tourists need to taste a special treat
Or poise on whaling boats awash off shore
Where from calm sea we can say we saw
The ones that fathom deep in 20 thousand feet.
O living sea, a vast unknown, give us a sign
That whales, free from pain can roam to Arctic North.
Darkening beaches, black basalt, glossed with brine
Greet birds flying from the cold Antarctic south
And on shore too, may San Miguel protect its own,
From fisher folk to tiny bird, keep vibrant green on red hot mouth.
Georgina Wright January 2016
Great poem
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Darkening beaches, black basalt, glossed with brine
Greet birds flying from the cold Antarctic south
A most wonderful sonnet Georgina 🙂
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Thanks Sanaa, but find it all a bit less flowing.
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Beautiful vibrant pictures and I specially like this part of the sonnet:
O living sea, a vast unknown, give us a sign
From fisher folk to tiny bird, keep vibrant green on red hot mouth.
Congrats on writing one as I know it is a challenge to write sonnets ~
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Thanks but it does keep the mind focused on key thoughts and feelings.
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I feel the rhythm of the waves in this sonnet – very artfully done…
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Love it Georgina. More!
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There are still parts of the world that have that pristine beauty. I remember Hawaii when it was like that, back in the 50’s, before it became such a tourist trap.
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Think that it what they are hoping for the Azores with all the new cheap flights, but the islanders need work and small businesses.
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Bjorn, & others, love the sonnet form. Yours is lovely & exotic, well written so that the form does not dominate the message. I’ve become enamored of the Haibun, in its many guises.
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Yes, I like the haibun too. Helps to keep a focus but not as concentrated as a sonnet?
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From fisher folk to tiny bird, keep vibrant green on red hot mouth…. idyllic.
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try stepping away from the reality of your adjectives
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Not sure I understand as the poem is about a real place?
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so we decided to quilt the humidity…great poem…
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Interesting way to think about the mists!
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I would love to visit Azores. Madeira I have been to many times, and I have seen it change. Still beautiful but soo many roads built. I love how you did the sonnet.
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Thanks, it was a special place and I would like to get to Madeira too but we are going to return to the Azores and find a wilder island!
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I think the lines ‘Darkening beaches, basalt black, glossed with brine/greet birds…’ has wonderful poetic images and sounds
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Thanks, I suppose the darkening is all about it not really being a paradise but needs to be a sanctuary for the wild sea birds.
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Beautiful, descriptive lines that flow with a natural rhythm.
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Thanks, am glad you think it flows!
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I like the “stuff” of your sonnet. Not sure you shouldn’t revisit it though. Since you stuck to the rhyme scheme, I am thinking you wanted it to be traditional. I am aware that sonnets are now more free; however, throughout the first stanza you wrote in tetrameter, following with some pentameter though with an extra hard syllable or two and then in the end had a number of hexameter lines. I think the poem could be tighter and more of a sonnet song if you tightened up the meter just a bit. It is a beautiful draft – just a teensy bit more work on finding the perfect words I think.
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Thanks, I felt it getting longer to the end but there was more to say! I did want to try rhyme schemes and that might have affected the line length. I will revisit as I want to see if I can grasp this form. Malcolm Guite is a poet and his sonnets just seem to work. He blogs too.
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A very pleasant visit… thanks
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Lovely sonnet… thanks for taking us through San Miguel! A wonderful vivid poem.
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Beautiful pictures to amplify the effect of your lovely sonnet. Have a good weekend.
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I think you did a very well with this sonnet. You make me wish I’d visited Sao Miguel. Sadly, I’ve never been to the Azores, and actually barely been to Portugal. I did spend four or five days visiting a friend in Oporto about 25 years ago, though. I thought it was an absolutely beautiful place and I’d love to go back some day if I ever have the chance.
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Hope you do as it is a lovely country.
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Sounds like a lovely place to visit. Love how you showed the reality of the island, too, by pointing out the poverty.
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Wonderful poetry. I enjoyed the images too, great place.
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Thanks, it has inspired me a lot!
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Volatile of Life..
change of Nature
human we at
core atomic..
ah.. untapped
volcano
you
brew
inside..
waiting
to explode
but tethered
by grace of Love..:)
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Thank you Katie Mia, another beautiful flow of words in response from you.
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SMiLes.. My friend.. Thanks so much for the inspiration of your poetry..:)
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Ok, will check this out soon. Am in process of flying back to UK but not as a Raven. Will look you up when have settled back to my London nest!
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